Well written

Thank you very much.

This is the first villanelle I've ever written, so the compliment is very welcome. xD

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...What, you though I would say something witty? Shame on you, I'm on break. XD

"Curiousity killed the cat, but Schrodinger stuffed it in a box." -Me

You're welcome

I really can't claim to be much of a poetry buff (despite turning up at parties dressed up like one and spouting the odd line) nor to actually know what exactly a villanelle is (though I can sort-of guess what it might be from the structure), but this?

It's kind of painful to read.
And in the absolute best way, I mean -- 'cause it kind of tugs at something in my chest and makes my stomach turn like it does when I'm fighting with somebody I care about. It's painful and somehow, even though it's not a complicated poem, it doesn't even need to be, it just... it's real. And it hurts.

The repeated lines just -- I don't know, I'm so bad with my stupid words -- it feels like I'm the one being accused, and I feel guilty and sick with myself.

_{Why are my comments always so convoluted. I'm just trying to say that I really really like this.}

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_{Scooch over, there's plenty rocket for all.}

Thank you for the convolution. xD

I can tell what you're saying here, and I think you're getting the real intent of the poem. Basically, at the time this was written, I was feeling really attacked by some stuff, and I wanted to lash out. I decided to do that in this poem, and chose alcohol as the problem not because it was relevant but because I knew people who had been in the situation the narrator is in here.

Truly, it is the reader being accused, so it makes me kind of happy that you felt that way, but then it also makes me sad because I don't want YOU to feel like you are on trial.

I...I think that subconsciously this was written based on my uncle, an alcoholic and a cheating husband whom my aunt recently divorced. He was a larger-than-life figure to me when I was younger, but now I see how pathetic he was.

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...What, you though I would say something witty? Shame on you, I'm on break. XD

"Curiousity killed the cat, but Schrodinger stuffed it in a box." -Me